我的英语6级作文写的如何,本人万分感谢

我的英语6级作文写的如何,本人万分感谢
2009年12月真题
1 现在有不少家长送孩子参加各种艺术班
2 对这种做法有人表示支持,也有人并不赞成
3 我认为.
Should Parents Send Their Kids to Art Classes?
Recently,an increasing members of parents send theri kids to all kind of art classes.Paying greatly attention to the art classes,the considerable parents believe that attend to the art classes could help their kids at they entrance the focus primary school with versatile skills.Therefore,art classes has fasinated among those parents.
This phenomenon,which has a hot sparked debates among citizens.A group of people believe that send kids into art classes is no better than any choice.It can improve the capability of children's skills,broaden their horizons and widen their eyes.It is important that the art classes cultivate children's recognize the world.While other citizens,holding the opposite viewpoint,believe that send kids to art classes may impact on their study,and they believe that children's promising in the future is the upmost.
As far as I am concerned,I support the former one.Sending kids to any art classes is better than the none.The saying goes:No pains,nogains.Obtaining more skills will promote your kids confidence,and it can help them with the right side for the future life.Why not send their kid to art classes?

1 kids:children
2.members:number send:are sending kids:children .
天啊 好多语法跟拼写错误.你拿word的语法修正一下吧 太多了
错漏百出 有反例子跟搞笑的嫌疑
另外用词不当的地方很多 建议你只用自己熟悉的词 不然的话 用英英字典看看这些词该怎麽用
给你擧几个例子：
considerable 一般只能用作 相当的,可观的 （你那句我没看懂 所以改不了）
citizens是指公民 你应该用public来指大众
kids 是口语词 不适合在文章裏用
horizons 你想指起跑线?英文裏面没有这个说法
widen their eyes 英文裏是说把他们的 眼睛 之间的距离弄开...不知道要用什麽外科手术了.
如果你是考试 你就 死 定 了
还是那句,用你最熟悉的句型跟词汇 这样至少不会在语法跟用词上出错 剩下的就是表达方式,中国的改卷人水平一般不会高到哪裏去,所以不会丢太多分的