修改 英语family:I have a wonderful family.My parents,two Brother

修改 英语
family:
I have a wonderful family.My parents,two Brothers,my sister and me are my family members.Both of my parents are doctors; they are very strict and always educate us when we made mistakes.My father believes that knowledge can change one's fortune.So,my father supply more opportunities for me to study .My brother graduated from a university last year,and is working in a Hospital of Guangzhou.He is responsible for the younger sibling’s tuition expenses.
In the family,we get along with each other very well and I am lucky enough because I have a good family.My parents are the people I love the most and appreciate the most in the world.
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hometown：
I come from Jieyang,a beautiful city of Guangdong province ,it is located in the eastern of Guangdong not far from Shantou.It is a middle-sized developing city,it's population is six million .Our city is famous of food.
People in my hometown are very hardworking and open-minded.They can accept new things quickly,furthermore they like do their work in a efficient way.They like enjoy their colorful life.
I love my hometown.Especially I love its people.They are working hard so as to make it richer and more beautiful.

family
第二行,when we make mistakes
第三行,用change one’s life更好,我觉得
第四行,用more没有比较的对象,用many就可以.a universtiy的a可以去掉不用,显得更english
第五行的expense也可以省去不用