灵鹊做题网英语作文检查语法错误（回答后再加分）
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英语作文检查语法错误（回答后再加分）
An important lesson
I learned an important lesson in a school trip when I was in grade six.Our school always held a trip at the end of each semester.All the students were excited to wait for that day.We filled up our bag with snacks the day before the trip.Then I went to a beautiful park with all my classmate by school bus.
We followed the teachers to walk around the park first.We were introduced the history of the park.Later on,the teachers divided us into a few groups.So we can see the park by following the group.However,we got some different opinions about going which directions.Then my best friend and I decided to visit on our own.There were a lot of trees that over a hundred years here.The lake looked green with the reflection of the trees.Some people were rowing a boat in the center of the lake.We rent a boat for half an hour.It was so romantic.After that,we wanted to have some new fun.We saw an old man who had many white pigeons stood in the trees.My friend loved pigeons.So I asked the old man if we can feed the birds.He said yes.We put the corns on the ground and all the pigeons flied around us.They were as beautiful as snow.We had a great time to play with them.The sky was getting darker.Then we remembered it’s time to go back to the school bus,but we forgot where the entrance of the park was.We walked around and around,there was no one here except for us.I almost started to cry.Suddenly,I heard someone was calling my name.That was my teacher.I know that the school bus had waited us over two hours.Only two of us were missing.All the teachers were worried about us.
The teacher let us to write a paragraph to realize our mistakes as a punishment.I was so regretful.I learned that I should always listen to the teachers and stay in the group.Or it will be very dangerous.I will never do that again.
An important lesson
I learned an important lesson in a school trip when I was in grade six.Our school always held a trip at the end of each semester.All the students were excited to wait for that day.We filled up our bag with snacks the day before the trip.Then I went to a beautiful park with all my classmate by school bus.
We followed the teachers to walk around the park first.We were introduced the history of the park.Later on,the teachers divided us into a few groups.So we can see the park by following the group.However,we got some different opinions about going which directions.Then my best friend and I decided to visit on our own.There were a lot of trees that over a hundred years here.The lake looked green with the reflection of the trees.Some people were rowing a boat in the center of the lake.We rent a boat for half an hour.It was so romantic.After that,we wanted to have some new fun.We saw an old man who had many white pigeons stood in the trees.My friend loved pigeons.So I asked the old man if we can feed the birds.He said yes.We put the corns on the ground and all the pigeons flied around us.They were as beautiful as snow.We had a great time to play with them.The sky was getting darker.Then we remembered it’s time to go back to the school bus,but we forgot where the entrance of the park was.We walked around and around,there was no one here except for us.I almost started to cry.Suddenly,I heard someone was calling my name.That was my teacher.I know that the school bus had waited us over two hours.Only two of us were missing.All the teachers were worried about us.
The teacher let us to write a paragraph to realize our mistakes as a punishment.I was so regretful.I learned that I should always listen to the teachers and stay in the group.Or it will be very dangerous.I will never do that again.
An important lesson
I learned an important lesson in a school trip when I was in grade six.Our school always held trips at the end of each semester.All the students waited with excitement for that day.We filled up our bag with snacks the day before the trip,then I went to a beautiful park with all my classmate by school bus.
We followed the teachers to walk around the park first,and the history of the park were introduced.Later on,the teachers divided us into a few groups,so we can see more details with smaller groups.However,we got some different opinions about going in which directions.Then my best friend and I decided to visit on our own.There were a lot of trees that are over a hundred years,and the lake looked green with the reflection of the trees.Some people were rowing boats in the center of the lake.We also rent a boat for half an hour; it was so romantic.After that,we wanted to have some new fun.We saw an old man,who had many white pigeons stood in the trees.My friend loved pigeons,so I asked the old man if we can feed the birds.He agreed.We put the corns on the ground and all the pigeons flied around us; they were as beautiful as snow.We had a great time to play with them.The sky was getting dark,and we remembered it was time to go back to the school bus.But we forgot where the entrance of the park was.We walked around and around,there was no one here except us.I almost started to cry.Suddenly,I heard someone calling my name.That was my teacher.I know that the school bus had waited for us over two hours - only two of us were missing.All the teachers were very worried.
The teacher ordered us to write a paragraph on realizing our mistakes.I was so regretful; I learned that I should always listen to the teachers and stay in the group,or it will be very dangerous.I will never do that again.
改完了.表示楼主思路很通畅,但是要注意断句.句号用的太多了,其实有些地方可以改为逗号的说.
再问： 非常感谢！！！ 顺便问一下，write a 3-paragraph narrative essay about a learning experience that changed you or taught you something valuable 这个题目 这样写中间的body部分写景会不会繁琐，有没有什么建议
再答： 其实这样的问题最好把 learning experience 和 change/taught 写的多一点，而且事发过程一带而过、让大家知道是怎么回事就好了。 因为它问的就是 change，你写太多其他的就跑题了，毕竟不是长篇大论，就是个3-para而已~ 建议你body里面第一句，就是topic sentence，把你学到了什么概括一下、让读者提起兴趣(hook懂吧~~)。然后用大概两三句话描写事情过程，接着写通过它了解到了什么或者改变了什么（占整体body的1/2，最后写写以后会怎么看待自己这次的行为，或者以后再遇到这类事情时候会怎么做之类的~ (^_^)
I learned an important lesson in a school trip when I was in grade six.Our school always held trips at the end of each semester.All the students waited with excitement for that day.We filled up our bag with snacks the day before the trip,then I went to a beautiful park with all my classmate by school bus.
We followed the teachers to walk around the park first,and the history of the park were introduced.Later on,the teachers divided us into a few groups,so we can see more details with smaller groups.However,we got some different opinions about going in which directions.Then my best friend and I decided to visit on our own.There were a lot of trees that are over a hundred years,and the lake looked green with the reflection of the trees.Some people were rowing boats in the center of the lake.We also rent a boat for half an hour; it was so romantic.After that,we wanted to have some new fun.We saw an old man,who had many white pigeons stood in the trees.My friend loved pigeons,so I asked the old man if we can feed the birds.He agreed.We put the corns on the ground and all the pigeons flied around us; they were as beautiful as snow.We had a great time to play with them.The sky was getting dark,and we remembered it was time to go back to the school bus.But we forgot where the entrance of the park was.We walked around and around,there was no one here except us.I almost started to cry.Suddenly,I heard someone calling my name.That was my teacher.I know that the school bus had waited for us over two hours - only two of us were missing.All the teachers were very worried.
The teacher ordered us to write a paragraph on realizing our mistakes.I was so regretful; I learned that I should always listen to the teachers and stay in the group,or it will be very dangerous.I will never do that again.
改完了.表示楼主思路很通畅,但是要注意断句.句号用的太多了,其实有些地方可以改为逗号的说.
再问： 非常感谢！！！ 顺便问一下，write a 3-paragraph narrative essay about a learning experience that changed you or taught you something valuable 这个题目 这样写中间的body部分写景会不会繁琐，有没有什么建议
再答： 其实这样的问题最好把 learning experience 和 change/taught 写的多一点，而且事发过程一带而过、让大家知道是怎么回事就好了。 因为它问的就是 change，你写太多其他的就跑题了，毕竟不是长篇大论，就是个3-para而已~ 建议你body里面第一句，就是topic sentence，把你学到了什么概括一下、让读者提起兴趣(hook懂吧~~)。然后用大概两三句话描写事情过程，接着写通过它了解到了什么或者改变了什么（占整体body的1/2，最后写写以后会怎么看待自己这次的行为，或者以后再遇到这类事情时候会怎么做之类的~ (^_^)