自己写的六级作文,请英语大神指教一二?My view on helping others in need

自己写的六级作文,请英语大神指教一二?My view on helping others in need
1.现在,在看到他人遇到困难时,很少有人去伸出援手；
2.这个现象产生的原因；
3.我的看法.
My view on helping others in need
Accordingto a recent survey,about 78.9% of people will be not bound to give a hand toothers in need.It is well established that the situation of requesting a helpis usually a cheat.However,when people who indeed need helps are in trouble,keeping silence may cause a terrible result.
Whydo not many people help others in need?For one thing,it’s a lie.One askedfor help when he fell down the stairs.If you helped him,he might say,” Itmust be you to push me!Give me some money of the medicine.” In fact,thisphenomenon is occurring more frequently nowadays.For another,it isn’t a lie,but hit a man’s heart deeply.For instance,a number of people will presentthose who help them with a just indifferent face.What’s more,the warm-heartedman gives his life to save them.They still take it for granted that,” It'snone of my business.”
Inspite of the negative news of helping others,there is no need to reject to helpeveryone.I adhere to a faith that there are more good people than bad ones inthe world.As long as we are more careful,the help behavior will pay off in a lifetime.
哪里不好，具体指出来谢谢，不要只说好坏o~

第一,把文章中的others改成people,并不是一有“别人”就得翻译从OTHERS.第二,bound有义务的,你不觉得别扭?换成be not willing to give...不情愿帮助别人.第三,situation of requesting a help is 改成situation where asking for help is.第四,即使是名词,help也是不可数的.第五,Itmust be you to push me,to改成who.第六,that,” It'snone of my business.”这句的标点符号整整,然后把THAT换成LIKE.第七,this phenomenon is occurring,换成 is occurring has been repeating itself.
你写的文章不怎么样.