英语翻译10年前,JIM先生选择了在淄博跟李总合资开办XX公司.那时的淄博经济不算发达,创业条件很艰苦.他设身处地为公司

英语翻译
10年前,JIM先生选择了在淄博跟李总合资开办XX公司.那时的淄博经济不算发达,创业条件很艰苦.他设身处地为公司着想,跟全体XX公司人一起努力一起拼搏.他以厂为家,晚上经常工作到很晚；经常开车到济南接送客户,毫无怨言；他领着外销员,开拓市场,巩固客户.10年的时间,XX公司从无到有,从小到大,可以说,JIM先生对公司的发展以及公司的成就有着不可磨灭的贡献.JIM的腰不好,患有腰间盘突出,但还是一直坚持工作.直到去年病发很严重才接受治疗,住院期间他一直惦记着工作惦记着XX公司,没有完全康复就回公司工作.JIM先生以身作则,为全体XX公司人树立了一个好榜样.让我们对JIM先生表示最崇高的敬意!
Ten yeas ago,Jim and Mr.Li started XX Company as a joint venture company in Zibo.At that time Zibo was with an underdeveloped economy and they started the company with hard condition.Jim always stands on behalf of the corporation,works hard with our people in XX Company.He usually works till night and consider XX Company as his family; he drives to Jinan to meet customers frequently without grievance; he leads the group sales developing the market and consolidating business with customers.
In this 10yeas,XX Company has developed so much.Jim has indelible contribution to its development as well the achievement.He has any ailment with his waist,suffering from intervertebral disk protrusion,but he insisted to work till last year he had the treatment; he thought about working when in the hospital and can’t wait for recovery to back.Jim is setting as an example for whole XX Company people.Let’s show our best regards to him!
中译英的,帮我看看那改改呢.

如果这是给外国公司的推荐信的话,是要不得的.从格式、结构到语言都要大改.
不过它避免了大部分推荐信的弊病：无具体事例.
但如果这是一个翻译作业的话,就已经很好了.