灵鹊做题网求助！明天英语演讲比赛，帮忙演讲稿看看有什么错误。
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求助！明天英语演讲比赛，帮忙演讲稿看看有什么错误。
I’m glad to share my dream with you today.I have kept the dream in my mind for so long that whoever in the sun is able to live a happy life for ever.
I think this dream is deeply rooted in the future. As we can see, we are now not far away from violence, poverty, diseases, environmental pollution and even wars. Most of people are in need of what they have never enjoyed. However, I still can stick to my innermost dream, as i still can see the bright lights in our future. I believe, there will be a day when those from the rich counties are really willing to share what they have with those from the poor countries;There will be a day when we are surprised to find that the word poverty has long been out of our memories; There will be a day when we are together to share our dreams and we will all contribute to making our common dreams come true.
I will not just wait but to take action to live in my dream.
最好可以把它改好在发上来，感谢！
I’m glad to share my dream with you today.I have kept the dream in my mind for so long that whoever in the sun is able to live a happy life for ever.
I think this dream is deeply rooted in the future. As we can see, we are now not far away from violence, poverty, diseases, environmental pollution and even wars. Most of people are in need of what they have never enjoyed. However, I still can stick to my innermost dream, as i still can see the bright lights in our future. I believe, there will be a day when those from the rich counties are really willing to share what they have with those from the poor countries;There will be a day when we are surprised to find that the word poverty has long been out of our memories; There will be a day when we are together to share our dreams and we will all contribute to making our common dreams come true.
I will not just wait but to take action to live in my dream.
最好可以把它改好在发上来，感谢！
"most of people"不需要添加of；in need of 后面不能加从句，只能加名词或名词短语，或者你可以直接去掉后面的“of what they never enjoyed", “I still can"不需要用still can，still can用在这句让句子不太通顺，the bright lights in our future 可以直接写成“our bright future, 简洁明了一些，those from the rich countries， those from the poor countries太过累赘，可以直接用the rich, the poor表示富人，穷人的意思，There will be a day when we are surprised to find that the word poverty has long been out of our memories这句话可以删去一些不必要的用语，the word poverty, 可以直接在poverty加双引号，I will not just wait but to take action to live in my dream.去掉just较好，to take 不用to，实现梦想不用live in 而是用pursue。希望你会满意我的回答，水平有限，错误之处，请见谅。