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为创新英语大赛练的两篇作文,求高手修改,24号早上6点半前给满分!
Directions:Some people maintain that universities are the best place for young people to receive higher education; other people believe that young people can be equally educated by taking correspondence courses or going to evening classes and open universities in their spare time.
Write an article of about 300 words in which you compare and contrast the advantages and disadvantages of formal university education and informal higher education.Which do you think is more effective and desirable?Support your argument with appropriate examples or illustrations.
University,I Choose ,I Like
If there is a french cuisine and some fast food in front of u,what will u choose?slowly enjoy or quickly eat?it's the same q when the topic switches to formal university education .for me,definitely,i will choose formal university education.
just like having a french cuisine ,i prefer slowly enjoying the lont time studying in a university.it id not only the advantage of unverdity education but also the disadvantage.in the whole 4(or more)years,u have enough time to learn a lot about what u r really interested in because u can choose more subjects besides ur compulsory classes.as a science student,i do hope i can reach for the peak of science and technology and do some academic research on biology.an evening school can't provide me with this kind of opportunity.however,by virtue of the long process,u have to spend more time and money on universities compared with taking correspondence courses."knowledge is power"the more u invest.the more u will gain,i think.isn't formal u e worth it?
there a 2 lively examples(2 cases in point?)i have 2sisters who r similar at ages.one has worked for years,but she isn't satisfied with such a low-paying job so she goes to an open universities,majoring eng.the other will soon be a master in a famous uni.facing an optimistic future job,she found an excellent boyfriend in her schlmates.
so to speak,the friends u make in college will become imptant human resource in ur both career and life.why not stay closer to those outstanding people by university edu.
to summary,i stronly believe though informal edu is convenient,it is the univ edu that serves more.
这篇我自己都感觉思路不清晰，又没什么亮点，但总算没跑题吧，实在想睡觉了，好多单词省着打的，但也有真的用错的词，小女在一偏僻小城里念高一，英语也就这个样子，
Directions:Some people maintain that universities are the best place for young people to receive higher education; other people believe that young people can be equally educated by taking correspondence courses or going to evening classes and open universities in their spare time.
Write an article of about 300 words in which you compare and contrast the advantages and disadvantages of formal university education and informal higher education.Which do you think is more effective and desirable?Support your argument with appropriate examples or illustrations.
University,I Choose ,I Like
If there is a french cuisine and some fast food in front of u,what will u choose?slowly enjoy or quickly eat?it's the same q when the topic switches to formal university education .for me,definitely,i will choose formal university education.
just like having a french cuisine ,i prefer slowly enjoying the lont time studying in a university.it id not only the advantage of unverdity education but also the disadvantage.in the whole 4(or more)years,u have enough time to learn a lot about what u r really interested in because u can choose more subjects besides ur compulsory classes.as a science student,i do hope i can reach for the peak of science and technology and do some academic research on biology.an evening school can't provide me with this kind of opportunity.however,by virtue of the long process,u have to spend more time and money on universities compared with taking correspondence courses."knowledge is power"the more u invest.the more u will gain,i think.isn't formal u e worth it?
there a 2 lively examples(2 cases in point?)i have 2sisters who r similar at ages.one has worked for years,but she isn't satisfied with such a low-paying job so she goes to an open universities,majoring eng.the other will soon be a master in a famous uni.facing an optimistic future job,she found an excellent boyfriend in her schlmates.
so to speak,the friends u make in college will become imptant human resource in ur both career and life.why not stay closer to those outstanding people by university edu.
to summary,i stronly believe though informal edu is convenient,it is the univ edu that serves more.
这篇我自己都感觉思路不清晰，又没什么亮点，但总算没跑题吧，实在想睡觉了，好多单词省着打的，但也有真的用错的词，小女在一偏僻小城里念高一，英语也就这个样子，
University,I Choose ,I Like
If there is a french cuisine and some fast food in front of u,what will u choose?
(which will u choose?)
u gave a and b for choosing,so 'which' is better
slowly enjoy or quickly eat?
(suggestion:A slow dinner or a quick meal?)
a french cuisine- noun,fast food - noun,so i would use nouns here instead\x14
it's the same q when the topic switches to formal university education .\x14
for me,definitely,i will choose formal university education.
(suggestion:for me,definitely,f u e is the choice.)
just like having a french cuisine ,i prefer slowly enjoying the lont time
studying in a university.
(...the long time )
(suggestion:studying as an undergraduate.)
u have used uni too often
it id not only the advantage of unverdity education but also the disadvantage.
(it id - what do u mean?)
or do u mean
u e has both advantages and disadvantages?
if so
(suggestion:UE,however,does have its disadvantages.)
unless u want to use the expression not only but also
in the whole 4(or more)years,u have enough time to learn a lot about what
u r really interested in because u can choose more subjects besides ur compulsory
classes.
(in the whole four years or more,...
(suggestion:u can have other selective courses besides...)
(suggestion:besides those compulsory ...)
as a science student,i do hope i can reach for the peak of science and technology
and do some academic research on biology.
(...i can reach the peak ...)
(suggestion:i could one day reach the...)
an evening school can't provide me with this kind of opportunity.
however,by virtue of the long process,u have to spend more time and money
on universities compared with taking correspondence courses.
(suggestion:however,because of the long time needed,u have ...)
"knowledge is power"the more u invest.the more u will gain,i think.isn't
formal u e worth it?
there a 2 lively examples(2 cases in point?)
(there are two lively examples.)
where no is single digit,spell it,so for 3,u write three,for twenty
four u use 24)
i have 2sisters who r similar at ages.
(sisters,who r ...)
one has worked for years,but she isn't satisfied with such a low-paying
job so she goes to an open universities,majoring eng.
(but has never been satisfied with...)
(...with those low-paying jobs so she has enrolled in an open university,
with eng as a major)
the other will soon be a master in a famous uni.facing an optimistic future
job,
(...soon be awarded a master degree by a famous...,
(suggestion:by a famous...,facing a bright future.)
(suggestion:name them,dont just one and the other)
she found an excellent boyfriend in her schlmates.
(suggestion:she met her boy friend,an excellent guy and a schoolmate.)\x14
so to speak,the friends u make in college will become imptant human resource
in ur both career and life.
(...important human resources ...)
(...in both ur career and ur life.)
why not stay closer to those outstanding people by university edu.
(so why not stay closer ...found in u)
to summary,i stronly believe though informal edu is convenient,it is the
univ edu that serves more.
(in summary,i strongly ...)
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u haven't explained why friends made in u would be important to one's career.
i dont know what is the average level of 高一
it is a good work on the whole
继续努力
If there is a french cuisine and some fast food in front of u,what will u choose?
(which will u choose?)
u gave a and b for choosing,so 'which' is better
slowly enjoy or quickly eat?
(suggestion:A slow dinner or a quick meal?)
a french cuisine- noun,fast food - noun,so i would use nouns here instead\x14
it's the same q when the topic switches to formal university education .\x14
for me,definitely,i will choose formal university education.
(suggestion:for me,definitely,f u e is the choice.)
just like having a french cuisine ,i prefer slowly enjoying the lont time
studying in a university.
(...the long time )
(suggestion:studying as an undergraduate.)
u have used uni too often
it id not only the advantage of unverdity education but also the disadvantage.
(it id - what do u mean?)
or do u mean
u e has both advantages and disadvantages?
if so
(suggestion:UE,however,does have its disadvantages.)
unless u want to use the expression not only but also
in the whole 4(or more)years,u have enough time to learn a lot about what
u r really interested in because u can choose more subjects besides ur compulsory
classes.
(in the whole four years or more,...
(suggestion:u can have other selective courses besides...)
(suggestion:besides those compulsory ...)
as a science student,i do hope i can reach for the peak of science and technology
and do some academic research on biology.
(...i can reach the peak ...)
(suggestion:i could one day reach the...)
an evening school can't provide me with this kind of opportunity.
however,by virtue of the long process,u have to spend more time and money
on universities compared with taking correspondence courses.
(suggestion:however,because of the long time needed,u have ...)
"knowledge is power"the more u invest.the more u will gain,i think.isn't
formal u e worth it?
there a 2 lively examples(2 cases in point?)
(there are two lively examples.)
where no is single digit,spell it,so for 3,u write three,for twenty
four u use 24)
i have 2sisters who r similar at ages.
(sisters,who r ...)
one has worked for years,but she isn't satisfied with such a low-paying
job so she goes to an open universities,majoring eng.
(but has never been satisfied with...)
(...with those low-paying jobs so she has enrolled in an open university,
with eng as a major)
the other will soon be a master in a famous uni.facing an optimistic future
job,
(...soon be awarded a master degree by a famous...,
(suggestion:by a famous...,facing a bright future.)
(suggestion:name them,dont just one and the other)
she found an excellent boyfriend in her schlmates.
(suggestion:she met her boy friend,an excellent guy and a schoolmate.)\x14
so to speak,the friends u make in college will become imptant human resource
in ur both career and life.
(...important human resources ...)
(...in both ur career and ur life.)
why not stay closer to those outstanding people by university edu.
(so why not stay closer ...found in u)
to summary,i stronly believe though informal edu is convenient,it is the
univ edu that serves more.
(in summary,i strongly ...)
----------
u haven't explained why friends made in u would be important to one's career.
i dont know what is the average level of 高一
it is a good work on the whole
继续努力