灵鹊做题网高手帮我看看这篇英文日记有什么错误
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高手帮我看看这篇英文日记有什么错误
语法、时态、用词之类等都行,最好能再给我个建议什么的,
Fighting
As usual,played guitar...searched the internet...searched the memory...Indeed,I am still looking forward to a fulfill and simple life.
To learn create poetry,create the music,and also speak a wonderful English(Note:London accent),even without the internet,without the parties with the best friends,I can involve into this life style.
I still desire to achieve these expectations,but because of the lasy habits,I fell in boring everyday,to get up late,playing without restraint,to do something didn't make sense...All above were a vicious circle for me.So if I want to achieve the dreams which I devote to,I must repentant.
Aza aza fighting...
restraint:节制 vicious circle:恶性循环 repentant:痛改前非
lazy....里面拼错了，呵呵
语法、时态、用词之类等都行,最好能再给我个建议什么的,
Fighting
As usual,played guitar...searched the internet...searched the memory...Indeed,I am still looking forward to a fulfill and simple life.
To learn create poetry,create the music,and also speak a wonderful English(Note:London accent),even without the internet,without the parties with the best friends,I can involve into this life style.
I still desire to achieve these expectations,but because of the lasy habits,I fell in boring everyday,to get up late,playing without restraint,to do something didn't make sense...All above were a vicious circle for me.So if I want to achieve the dreams which I devote to,I must repentant.
Aza aza fighting...
restraint:节制 vicious circle:恶性循环 repentant:痛改前非
lazy....里面拼错了，呵呵
Fighting
As usual,played guitar...searched the internet...searched the memory...Indeed,I am still looking forward to a fulfill and simple life.
1、前面不用过去时.直接讲play guitar,surf the internet就可以.
2、上网时surf the internet,用search的意思是在网上搜索.
3、search the memory是想说什么?回忆吗?还是寻找回忆?是啥米?
4、充实而简单的生活：fulfilled and simple life.
To learn create poetry,create the music,and also speak a wonderful English(Note:London accent),even without the internet,without the parties with the best friends,I can involve into this life style.
1、learn后面跟to.
2、讲流利的英文：fluent English,不用wonderful...
这段话你想表达什么?不是很清楚.你是不是想说为了创作音乐,为了讲流利英语,即使我没得上网,没得去玩,我还是愿意过这样的生活.
如果是这个意思,你最好前面加in order to,而不仅仅是to.
In order to creat music and speak fluent English,even if I can not surf the Internet and can not go to parties with best friend,I am still willing to have this kind of life.
I still desire to achieve these expectations,but because of the lasy habits,I fell in boring everyday,to get up late,playing without restraint,to do something didn't make sense...All above were a vicious circle for me.So if I want to achieve the dreams which I devote to,I must repentant.
1、I fell in boring这个表达不是很正确.可以说my life is boring.
2、to do something didnt make sense是定语从句,应该加to do something that doesnt make sense.
3、I want to achieve the goal或者I want to realize the dream都可以,但没有achieve the dream.
Aza aza fighting...
（AZA AZA是韩语才有的吧……英语好像莫有介种说法……）
总体来说,我还是不知道你想写过去发生的事情还是现在发生的.我建议你全篇改回一般现在时.希望有用.
As usual,played guitar...searched the internet...searched the memory...Indeed,I am still looking forward to a fulfill and simple life.
1、前面不用过去时.直接讲play guitar,surf the internet就可以.
2、上网时surf the internet,用search的意思是在网上搜索.
3、search the memory是想说什么?回忆吗?还是寻找回忆?是啥米?
4、充实而简单的生活：fulfilled and simple life.
To learn create poetry,create the music,and also speak a wonderful English(Note:London accent),even without the internet,without the parties with the best friends,I can involve into this life style.
1、learn后面跟to.
2、讲流利的英文：fluent English,不用wonderful...
这段话你想表达什么?不是很清楚.你是不是想说为了创作音乐,为了讲流利英语,即使我没得上网,没得去玩,我还是愿意过这样的生活.
如果是这个意思,你最好前面加in order to,而不仅仅是to.
In order to creat music and speak fluent English,even if I can not surf the Internet and can not go to parties with best friend,I am still willing to have this kind of life.
I still desire to achieve these expectations,but because of the lasy habits,I fell in boring everyday,to get up late,playing without restraint,to do something didn't make sense...All above were a vicious circle for me.So if I want to achieve the dreams which I devote to,I must repentant.
1、I fell in boring这个表达不是很正确.可以说my life is boring.
2、to do something didnt make sense是定语从句,应该加to do something that doesnt make sense.
3、I want to achieve the goal或者I want to realize the dream都可以,但没有achieve the dream.
Aza aza fighting...
（AZA AZA是韩语才有的吧……英语好像莫有介种说法……）
总体来说,我还是不知道你想写过去发生的事情还是现在发生的.我建议你全篇改回一般现在时.希望有用.