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老师您好请您帮助！这是我做的书面表达练习，红色字体是我的答题内容，请您按中考判分标准，给予批改点评并打分。满分15分的标准。谢谢您！祝您新春快乐！
书面表达（15分）
在今年的地球一小时活动中，中国很多城市的人们都自觉熄灯一小时，体现了低碳生活的新理念。假定你是cctv9的记者，请你根据以下采访信息用英语写一篇80词左右的新闻稿。注意：部分内容以为你写好，不计入总词数。
Earth Hour : 1. What people are doing: a. Shanghai: taking a walk with the family
b. Beijing: having a nice talk with friends
c. Ningbo: holding a party in the park
Change lifestyle: spend more time with family and friends 2. What people plan to do :Protect the environment: a. plant more trees b. use paper both sides c. ………
Thank you for joining CCTV’s Around China show! Now it’s 8:45p.m. During the famous Earth Hour. People in many cities have turned off their lights and are having a very special time. In Shanghai, (people are taking a walk with their family instead of driving a car, and in Ningbo: people turn off their light and go outside to holding a party in the park. When I look this, my heart is filling with joy, because if this be done, the air will be fresh and clean. And when I heard about people change their life style, they spend more time with their family and friend, I am happy too.)
Many people share with us their plans. (Such as: plant more trees, use paper both side, save water, clean the river and so on! I am happy once more. If the environment is being protected, our earth will be cover with green……)
书面表达（15分）
在今年的地球一小时活动中，中国很多城市的人们都自觉熄灯一小时，体现了低碳生活的新理念。假定你是cctv9的记者，请你根据以下采访信息用英语写一篇80词左右的新闻稿。注意：部分内容以为你写好，不计入总词数。
Earth Hour : 1. What people are doing: a. Shanghai: taking a walk with the family
b. Beijing: having a nice talk with friends
c. Ningbo: holding a party in the park
Change lifestyle: spend more time with family and friends 2. What people plan to do :Protect the environment: a. plant more trees b. use paper both sides c. ………
Thank you for joining CCTV’s Around China show! Now it’s 8:45p.m. During the famous Earth Hour. People in many cities have turned off their lights and are having a very special time. In Shanghai, (people are taking a walk with their family instead of driving a car, and in Ningbo: people turn off their light and go outside to holding a party in the park. When I look this, my heart is filling with joy, because if this be done, the air will be fresh and clean. And when I heard about people change their life style, they spend more time with their family and friend, I am happy too.)
Many people share with us their plans. (Such as: plant more trees, use paper both side, save water, clean the river and so on! I am happy once more. If the environment is being protected, our earth will be cover with green……)
解题思路： 见解答过程
解题过程：
(some people are taking a walk with their family instead of driving a car, and in Ningbo:some people are holding a party in the park. In Beijing ,some people are having a nice talk with their friends .When I see this, my heart is filled with joy, because if we do like this , the air will be fresher and cleaner.
Many people share with us their plans. (Some say they will spend more time with their family and friends .Others say they will try their best to protect the environment like planting more trees, using paper both sides, saving water, cleaning the river and so on! I am happy once more. If everyone protects the environment ,our earth will be cover with green……) 同学你好，你的这篇短文从总体上讲还是不错的，能够使用学过的短语、句型以及被动语态，能把自己的体会用语言表达出来，老师感觉你是一个敢于尝试的同学，但是在写提纲性要点作文时，要注意要点的完整。（你的短文中把北京的情况忽略了） 。再者，以if 引导的条件状语从句，从句应用一般现在时，即所谓的“主将从现”。如果按中考标准打分的话，你的作文可得11分。加油！
最终答案：略
解题过程：
(some people are taking a walk with their family instead of driving a car, and in Ningbo:some people are holding a party in the park. In Beijing ,some people are having a nice talk with their friends .When I see this, my heart is filled with joy, because if we do like this , the air will be fresher and cleaner.
Many people share with us their plans. (Some say they will spend more time with their family and friends .Others say they will try their best to protect the environment like planting more trees, using paper both sides, saving water, cleaning the river and so on! I am happy once more. If everyone protects the environment ,our earth will be cover with green……) 同学你好，你的这篇短文从总体上讲还是不错的，能够使用学过的短语、句型以及被动语态，能把自己的体会用语言表达出来，老师感觉你是一个敢于尝试的同学，但是在写提纲性要点作文时，要注意要点的完整。（你的短文中把北京的情况忽略了） 。再者，以if 引导的条件状语从句，从句应用一般现在时，即所谓的“主将从现”。如果按中考标准打分的话，你的作文可得11分。加油！
最终答案：略